I'm having some problems with a story I'm working on. I'm trying to write it first person past, as though one of the main characters is writing the experiences in his secret journal. I'm pretty eloquent when I write, so this presents a problem to the authenticity of the story. I'm afraid it won't come out sounding real if I wrote his journal stuff in my own style. So I tried to "dumb it down" of sorts, using shorter sentences and less description, and it stinks. Does anyone else have problems with voice?